初級寫作修改-029

jamie   

• Are you still fix English?!
  I need help,thank you.

  Every­one learned Eng­lish when their was young, but who live it? My friend learn­ing it every week­end, but I can’t do it because I should take care of my baby that is buzy every­day. some pic­tures all­ways lat me remem­ber a good time that I want to U.S. I know if I want to get great Eng­lish I must learn so hot, if I have 24hr a day.

HELLO JAMIE,
我有空的時候還是會改改作文
別擔心
妳就寫
我會盡量找時間回覆
以下是修改
Every­one learned Eng­lish when they were young, but who live with it?
they和their的用法請參考代名詞的介紹喔！=)

My friend learns it every week­end, but I can’t do it because I have to take care of my baby which keeps me busy everyday.
朋友固定在學所以要用現在式，朋友只有一個人所要用第三人稱單數
should的用法比較硬，會讓人覺得妳不是很情願做這件事，但我想妳一定不是這樣，用have to慧比較柔軟一點
Some pic­tures always remind me the hap­py times in the U.S.
LET ME REMEMBER 比較中式英文，用REMIND(提醒)會比較好
HAPPY TIME用複數會表示有許多的快樂時光，而不是只有一個
I know if I want to use Eng­lish well I must learn it so hard.
英文是被使用(use)如果用get(得到)的話後面可能要加上受詞，例如分數(grades)
努力學習那個字是hard喔=)
最後一句我不太懂妳意思，不知道妳為何要放那邊?直接省略吧!!

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希望有幫到妳=)